As part of Rachael Harrie's Platform-Building Campaign we've been given our first flash fiction challenge. The Challenge is:
Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “Shadows crept across the wall”. These five words will be included in the word count.
If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), do one or more of these:
- end the story with the words: "everything faded." (also included in the word count)
- include the word "orange" in the story
- write in the same genre you normally write
- make your story 200 words exactly!
The Other Side
Shadows crept across the wall. It was him.
“I know you’re here.” My voice cut through the silence of my empty bedroom.
Every night he’d been coming. Invisible, but present, his silhouetted form the only proof I wasn’t crazy. I clicked on my bedside lamp. He couldn’t hide in the orange glow.
I gasped as the light outlined his shaded figure.
He moved quickly, away from me.
“Don’t go,” I shouted. “I want to come with you.”
He stopped, came closer. I reached for him. The way the air warmed where he stood was both terrifying and exciting. He was real.
I felt the warmth on my face, his hand.
“I know it’s you, Jack,” I said, tears wetting my lashes. I’d never loved anyone else. He’d died too soon. “Please take me with you.”
The warmth moved to my lips, and I breathed it in, the familiar scent of sage and earth.
“Please.”
His invisible hands found my neck, gently at first. The pulse of my heart quickened beneath the heat of his fingers.
“Do it.”
The loss of air was startling, but I wanted this. I couldn’t live without him. I smiled with closed eyes as everything faded.
If you liked my story, you can give it a thumbs up here. I'm #47.
Whoa that was really good! So heart-wrenching. Loved it :)
ReplyDeleteYou have my vote!
I'm entry #19
Way to go, Jessica. Great scene.
ReplyDelete~Sabrina #14
OMG - this is amazing! Brilliant!
ReplyDeleteYeah, wow. Loved this one! Excellent job. I want to read more.
ReplyDeleteI dig dialogue scenes. So much can be said about he characters and the setting by what people say. Definitely a favorite of mine so far. Nice one! :)
ReplyDeleteHey Jessica! Congratulations on your book - saw your picture on Mark from Hawaii's blog today and I'm not sure which of you looked happier.
ReplyDeleteWow. Damm you talented people (shakes fist).. coming here and ruining it for all the rest of us. ;) Seriously loved it, and I'm not real a paranormal romancey type of guy. Just tremendous.
ReplyDeleteYou know I'm already a Jessica Therrien fan. :D Great work!
ReplyDeleteThat was great - swept me right in! I'm visiting from Mark's blog - congrats on your upcoming release!
ReplyDeleteWow. Beautiful and tragic. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteAw, how sad. I hope they at least got to be together.
ReplyDeleteJust wanted to let you know that you've moved on to the second round of judging. :)
ReplyDeleteWow, this is great. A ghost/love story? Can't beat that! Way to go!
ReplyDeleteTouching and bittersweet - loved it :)
ReplyDeleteThis was sad. I loved the way it was written and I wanted to read more! Great job!
ReplyDelete(Ooh, I saw that picture when I was googling for pictures to add to my post!)
ReplyDeleteWOW, hectic ending! Such a well-written piece of fiction. "The loss of air was startling"...
Gave it a thumbs up ;-)
Okay that was intense! I really enjoyed it. Very well done!
ReplyDeleteHmm, if this is a glimpse of what I get to read when Oppression comes out, my level of excitement just went WAY up! Great job.
ReplyDeleteI loved this one! Great job! You have my vote! :D
ReplyDeleteI'm #37
Beautifully done. Loved it
ReplyDeleteWOW! Great job! Definitely gets a "Like" from me! New follower - look forward to reading your posts! Good luck with your release!
ReplyDeleteCreepy, but very nice. Made the air catch in my throat.
ReplyDeleteI had chills reading this. Very nicely done!
ReplyDeleteI'm #36 if you want to check it out.
what a way to go! love across any boundary.
ReplyDeletebeautiful!
Awesome! =)
ReplyDeleteGreat flow. Really enjoyed it! Nice job & good luck!
ReplyDeleteVery nice! I really like this. In my WIP, one of my characters smells like sage, too.
ReplyDeleteAw, a sweet ghost story! How unique! Well done. I'm a new follower and entry #96
ReplyDeleteWow. Definitely loved this. Great job.
ReplyDeletevery passionate.
ReplyDeleteWell done, very bittersweet.
ReplyDelete#83
Beautifully written. I loved the last line.
ReplyDeleteGreat story! I enjoyed reading it. Truly.
ReplyDeleteSpooky! I guess that's taking love to the ultimate. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteLike!!
ReplyDeleteLoved your disruption of Jack
ReplyDelete#109
Super! You get a vote from me. = )
ReplyDeleteMelissa Maygrove
Campaign Entry #149
Interesting twist to the usual love story. Very nice!
ReplyDeleteGorgeous and touching. I'm liking!! Great job.
ReplyDelete#169
Freaky! Loved it!
ReplyDeleteA haunting love story. I didn't even mean to be pun-y, but that's the best word to describe it.
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely breath-taking, literally. I really enjoyed the picture you painted. Great idea.
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